Your prize, her sentence

18 May

Your prize, her sentence
By Tadalena Warner

The nerve,
it was you,
heartless, ruthless,
cunning in your crew.
Underneath that façade,
your beast,
careful in aiming your piece.
Spilling blood as honey,
you stole innocence,
a life; hers, for money.

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16 Responses to “Your prize, her sentence”

  1. barbara May 18, 2013 at 8:06 pm #

    whoa! tight – well done!

    • Tad May 18, 2013 at 10:32 pm #

      Thank you.

  2. KymmInBarcelona May 18, 2013 at 10:24 pm #

    Cool rhyme, creepy tale!

    • Tad May 18, 2013 at 10:35 pm #

      Thank you

  3. Lane May 18, 2013 at 11:36 pm #

    Great story telling–really sparks the imagination.

    • Tad May 19, 2013 at 12:21 am #

      Thank you

  4. jannatwrites May 19, 2013 at 6:01 am #

    I like how you told a complete story in 33 words. I like it!

    • Tad May 19, 2013 at 4:40 pm #

      Thank you

  5. atrm61 May 19, 2013 at 8:05 pm #

    “Spilling blood as honey,
    you stole innocence,
    a life; hers, for money.”

    Chilling tale-told perfectly in just 33 words:-)

    • Tad May 20, 2013 at 1:37 am #

      Thank you

      • atrm61 May 20, 2013 at 8:43 am #

        🙂

  6. Barbara @ allmylivesnow.blogspot.com May 19, 2013 at 9:31 pm #

    Haunting and eerie. Nicely done.

    • Tad May 20, 2013 at 1:38 am #

      Thank you

  7. Draug419 May 20, 2013 at 1:42 am #

    This is really interesting!

    • Tad May 20, 2013 at 1:48 am #

      Thank you for reading 🙂

  8. christina May 20, 2013 at 12:37 pm #

    this was awesome. I loved the pace and I loved that it left me feeling kinda pissed.

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